What are your thoughts on my writing?

[Katie]

I will delete it in a little and change it around, but I wanted to see what you guys think of the first chapter of my story. I'm most likely going to turn it into a book and I have the whole details planned out, but what do you think of it so far:

http://www.worthyofpublishing.com/book.asp?book_ID=5730

 

[Derral Suller]

"I'm most likely going to turn it into a book and I have the whole details planned out..."

Same thing I read the other day? I really hope you make it into a book. Good luck if you do.

Best wishes,


Cook

 

[Uncommon Sense]

Good ideas, but need to work on character development, scene, moving the plot, ect. That's why you go to college first : )

 

[DiamondJem]

Good, needs more description and accurate punctuation. Also what is the story leading up to the party? Apart from the fact she had just graduated...