geckostar34
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Well this is only page one of my chapter is it any good? some improvements? Description I know I need more of. Please read it all thanks.
The wind whistled in the dark sky night. As if to blow trees out of there roots and into the air. Birds hid in the hollow trunks of these larger towers for protection. Though the wind stopped eventually that didn’t mean that Mother Nature was through. Ari sat up in her bed looked out the window to her left. The clouds where crying softly leaving lakes of its tears on the ground to soften the earth. Washington wasn’t exactly a place of dry weather, it never was.
She rotated around towards the floor and placed her feet down gently. Ari looked around the room and found no one in there bunks. Each bunk was separated by a window on both of its sides. The room was about as big as a small barn and not an inch bigger. It was split down the middle so that it gave the boys and girls some privacy. She glanced over the curtains and found no one on the boys’ side either.
Ari exited the room and wandered around the building for a few minutes. She looked in the living room and in Mrs. Marina’s room as well. They were no where in sight, at least not where she looked. Ari walked over to the library and peered inside. Again no one was found. Her stomach let out a growl of hunger. Ari looked up and saw that it was ten o’clock exactly. She slowly closed the door and walked down to the kitchen. She flipped the switch on and a sudden cheer up roared from inside. Everybody stood around the table with their self made party hats. An oblong cake laid in the center of the table with five different candles on top, Ari let out a smile.
“Happy Birthday!” shouted everyone accept Holly and her robots.
“Appy birthay Awy” said a little girl named Molly. Her hands were behind her back and she was slightly swaying back and forth. Ari kneeled down and looked at Molly and said thoughtfully.
“What’s that behind your back?”
“It’s my bunny!” she said, her voice filled with joy. She looked back down at the bunny and looked back up at Ari “You can have it if you want”
“No its okay, it’s your bunny like you said” Ari stood up and patted her little head. She walked over to Mrs. Marina and frowned. “What is all this?” Ari whispered. The kids were thankfully not paying attention and were talking and playing amongst themselves
“You have never thrown a birthday for any one” mainly because the orphanage was very low on funds. “I don’t think this is fair, I won’t accept this”
“Well then since it is a new year I decided to get a few more weekend jobs to give all of you a birthday party” said Mrs. Marina with a smile.
“So two thousand ten is the luck year” Ari said.
“Yep, come on your thirteen now lets celebrate it” she said with a timid tone. Ari would have questioned her, but there was a great chance her answer would be rejected.
Everyone gathered around as Ari sat down next to the cake mostly because they haven’t ever had it and wanted it badly. Mrs. Marina went and turned off the light. The candles burned brightly on top of the strange cake. “Make a wish” whispered Molly and Ari blew out the candles. The phone rang and some of the younger kids screamed. Mrs. Marina found the switch and turned the lights back on. She ran over to the phone and answered it.
“Hello? Oh hi. Yes. Really! Oh thank you sir I won’t let you down!” Her expression was filled with joy. “I got a raise! A fifty dollar raise! Now I’ll be making seventy dollars a week!” Everyone looked at each other in shock and joy.
“I guess this really is your year” Ari said giving her a smile.
The wind whistled in the dark sky night. As if to blow trees out of there roots and into the air. Birds hid in the hollow trunks of these larger towers for protection. Though the wind stopped eventually that didn’t mean that Mother Nature was through. Ari sat up in her bed looked out the window to her left. The clouds where crying softly leaving lakes of its tears on the ground to soften the earth. Washington wasn’t exactly a place of dry weather, it never was.
She rotated around towards the floor and placed her feet down gently. Ari looked around the room and found no one in there bunks. Each bunk was separated by a window on both of its sides. The room was about as big as a small barn and not an inch bigger. It was split down the middle so that it gave the boys and girls some privacy. She glanced over the curtains and found no one on the boys’ side either.
Ari exited the room and wandered around the building for a few minutes. She looked in the living room and in Mrs. Marina’s room as well. They were no where in sight, at least not where she looked. Ari walked over to the library and peered inside. Again no one was found. Her stomach let out a growl of hunger. Ari looked up and saw that it was ten o’clock exactly. She slowly closed the door and walked down to the kitchen. She flipped the switch on and a sudden cheer up roared from inside. Everybody stood around the table with their self made party hats. An oblong cake laid in the center of the table with five different candles on top, Ari let out a smile.
“Happy Birthday!” shouted everyone accept Holly and her robots.
“Appy birthay Awy” said a little girl named Molly. Her hands were behind her back and she was slightly swaying back and forth. Ari kneeled down and looked at Molly and said thoughtfully.
“What’s that behind your back?”
“It’s my bunny!” she said, her voice filled with joy. She looked back down at the bunny and looked back up at Ari “You can have it if you want”
“No its okay, it’s your bunny like you said” Ari stood up and patted her little head. She walked over to Mrs. Marina and frowned. “What is all this?” Ari whispered. The kids were thankfully not paying attention and were talking and playing amongst themselves
“You have never thrown a birthday for any one” mainly because the orphanage was very low on funds. “I don’t think this is fair, I won’t accept this”
“Well then since it is a new year I decided to get a few more weekend jobs to give all of you a birthday party” said Mrs. Marina with a smile.
“So two thousand ten is the luck year” Ari said.
“Yep, come on your thirteen now lets celebrate it” she said with a timid tone. Ari would have questioned her, but there was a great chance her answer would be rejected.
Everyone gathered around as Ari sat down next to the cake mostly because they haven’t ever had it and wanted it badly. Mrs. Marina went and turned off the light. The candles burned brightly on top of the strange cake. “Make a wish” whispered Molly and Ari blew out the candles. The phone rang and some of the younger kids screamed. Mrs. Marina found the switch and turned the lights back on. She ran over to the phone and answered it.
“Hello? Oh hi. Yes. Really! Oh thank you sir I won’t let you down!” Her expression was filled with joy. “I got a raise! A fifty dollar raise! Now I’ll be making seventy dollars a week!” Everyone looked at each other in shock and joy.
“I guess this really is your year” Ari said giving her a smile.