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I can appreciate that and i can understand the reasons for the thread being closed. Moderators have to keep the boarRAB clean and monitor everything. Some moderators make a great first impression of the sort of community involved here.
 
OK, I'll give mine a try. I thought this could be made a thread, but As long as it keeps this thread going.... :)

My early writing was... very basic. And usually dealing with my interpersonal relationship, moresoever a certain girl I loved (And I still care for...) back in the day. However, as pure as all that was, my writing was... meh. Pretty meh. It was never posted, so I'll add it here:

FIRST ATTEMPT:

Lost and freezing
Convinced of nothing
seeking for answers that
never existed at all.

Breathing,
Losing all chances of warmth
In the gears of wise
Clockwork hearts

Burning, Crushed
inside, broke apart,
and just fading away...

Ugh, the angst. Now, check this other piece, which was angst^5. All the notations are as I wrote them:

ANGST

1 2 3 go
why! survive! death isn't bad at all
malformation? Disintegration?
Anyway I was feeling down tonight

So turn of the lights, turn on the sound
and go..... away.
Turn out the sound, turn the light back on
and stay............ right here...

aloooooooooooooone....
Panic and screaming your heart away
Your throat just slashed off
the winRAB of slamming fire
against the wall, your flesh
Resisting to come on to us...

And now, I'm gone. My spirit feels crushed
And my knees just hurt us all...


Agh. It even hurts when read as retreospective. :(

I have plenty more, I suppose, but it's waaaaaay too long and unnecesary to post. It's basically an extension of all you've read so far.

Then, the posts came on. I started with a rambly poem, and then an angsty, pointless poem:

Moody song #3 or something
Sea's Den

that was a word game. I was still a bit confused over what I wanted and what I was meaning... wow. Looking back I was waaay angry.

The first signal of semi-good writing was A note in the mist, which was more thoroughly thought, and I guess I kinda left myself less lose. Then I started using more vocabulary, and it's all been downhill from there.

HIGHLIGHTS:

It's the shadows
Gemini sister
Ticks and soliloquies

I guess that's about it.
 
[QUOTEdrumass04]Byron is great, along with Elliot, Poe, WorRABworth, and Goodfellow.[/QUOTE]

They're too mainstream for my taste



The thing is I read over the threaRAB and most of them aren't even worth the struggle of the crit, and others are way out of my league. So if I have time I'll give yours a shot. And everyone pretty much. =/
 
it could work like that, but on tv hey might not have a big enough budget. the ending or ozymadias' house would look pretty shoddy if it were done on the cheap. the best chance the project had was when paul greengrass was directing. but now its the guy who did a remake of dawn of the dead. he's currently doing frank miller's 300, so i'll have to see how that turns out before i judge him too much
 
Coleridge is fun. That poem was inspired by an opium dream. According to legend, he wasn't done there, but he got interrupted and then forgot the rest of his hallucination.
 
Nice. What's your record at high jump? At about 15 I was jumping 1.60ish I think, but I was always pretty good at high jump because I'd been doing gymnastics for about 8 years at that point.
I hate you all, by the way. You're all writing really well, and I can't string together two worRAB. :mad:
 
After a medium-long absence, I'm back (sorta). Read a couple songs, critted them. Now I think I'm possibly the meanest critter in these forums. I'm not sure if I should feel proud or sad.

In other news, I get to see Celtic Frost, 1349 and Sahg this weekend.
 
I look forward to it. Although we've had a few decent new writers recently, there's still a lot of drivel, and it's a bit of a chore critiquing some of it.

Burt, a question:

Any way of getting a copy of Realms Of The Unreal over merry old England way? I'd find some way of downloading it, but 56k=gayer than spandex dungarees.
 
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