It's alright. Poetry is one of those things where you either have it or you don't. I mean. This is mediocre to me. I'm not saying you're a bad writer, but this poem didn't stand out among the others I've been reading. But don't stop writing. Keep writing, you'll only grow in time. If you'd like me to read anything else, or if you're looking for more feedback, email me at [email protected].