Anyone want to help polish this up?

Halaine

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Okay i just wrote this so it's pretty raw but if anyone wants to help me edit it or give a second opinion i'd greatly appreciate it:P

Madness
Irrational tears, bursts of anger
A sense of loneliness
This is what Doctor says
Are the first signs of madness
They say that when you go loony
Your freed of all mishaps
They couldn’t be more wrong because it’s more like being trapped
They say your world lightens
As you enter a happier place
But every time I close my eyes
All I seek is your embrace
I’ve tried snapping my heels together
Again and again and again
But every time I open my eyes to find
Every thing’s the same
On hot days I wear coats
And wrap myself up tight
When twilight comes I cry myself
All the way through the night
Stanger still so soundly I sleep
When lightning roars and sparks
I’ve found a sort of refuge in
The shadows of the dark
You said you’d always be with me
You promised that you’d stay
And when you went, you left nothing behind
You took my life away
All that remains here in this place
Is me, madness and I
Do you know the part that hurts the most
You didn’t even say goodbye
Echoing accusations, painful memories
A sense of emptiness
That’s the only thing you left behind
This girl of madness
 
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