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Is it terrifying? Lonely? overwhelming? Fun? I want to go to a school far away but my family is the one that's like "that's too far!" but that was never my concern..now i'm having second thoughts..what do you think? do you have any experiences with a far away university?

There's a lot of action on the story that involves my main character doing and seeing things, and I feel like I'm using so many she's and her's that it'll become too noticeable. Is there a way to minimize this, or is it normal? Might placing them in different parts of the sentences, like in the...

I seem to use too much physical detail. Like.. "she saw the high slopes." "Rows of flags beat the air." "I made out Kelly bolting towards me." stuff like that. It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down...

I seem to use too much physical detail. Like.. "she saw the high slopes." "Rows of flags beat the air." "I made out Kelly bolting towards me." stuff like that. It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down...

I seem to use too much physical detail. Like.. "she saw the high slopes." "Rows of flags beat the air." "I made out Kelly bolting towards me." stuff like that. It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down...

I seem to use too much physical detail. Like.. "she saw the high slopes." "Rows of flags beat the air." "I made out Kelly bolting towards me." stuff like that. It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down...

I seem to use too much physical detail. Like.. "she saw the high slopes." "Rows of flags beat the air." "I made out Kelly bolting towards me." stuff like that. It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down...

I seem to use too much physical detail. Like.. "she saw the high slopes." "Rows of flags beat the air." "I made out Kelly bolting towards me." stuff like that. It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down...

I seem to use too much physical detail. Like.. "she saw the high slopes." "Rows of flags beat the air." "I made out Kelly bolting towards me." stuff like that. It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down...

I seem to use too much physical detail. Like.. "she saw the high slopes." "Rows of flags beat the air." "I made out Kelly bolting towards me." stuff like that. It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down...

I seem to use too much physical detail. Like.. "she saw the high slopes." "Rows of flags beat the air." "I made out Kelly bolting towards me." stuff like that. It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down...

Food Fight!

Lemony Snicket. def.

This is out of curiosity. My character's name is Sevilen. He's a guy. I'm wondering what images people connect to the name. the personality. the look. I've got my image down already, but i'm interested in your imagery.

I count my summer days, i'm still feeling this way I see that I've grown, but i'm still grinding my bones.. *Sigh The loudness in my head, the boys I brought to bed I sleep with their ghosts, what do I want the most? If I could swim off this coast.. I would paddle far across the sapphire...