Yellowspotlight89
New member
I seem to use too much physical detail.
Like..
"she saw the high slopes."
"Rows of flags beat the air."
"I made out Kelly bolting towards me."
stuff like that.
It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down.
i have touch in too, too. lots of "she roughed my shoulder" and "tingles raced up my arms" but not as much of the other stuff. i feel its hard to put it in naturally. can you help? thank ya!
God bless!
Like..
"she saw the high slopes."
"Rows of flags beat the air."
"I made out Kelly bolting towards me."
stuff like that.
It's all physical, and I'm not sure how to naturally add more sensory details (taste, smell, ect) without lagging the story down.
i have touch in too, too. lots of "she roughed my shoulder" and "tingles raced up my arms" but not as much of the other stuff. i feel its hard to put it in naturally. can you help? thank ya!
God bless!