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    if you had your druthers (oh yes, druthers) would you rather see...?

    I can't possibly pick one over the other. They are ALL equally important to me.
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    Would you be flattered if this was you? It's about Milieu?

    Milieu the Number 1 Answerer on the USA Leader board (the one with the most BA's) has altered his/her avatar. Yes that's right, and has now included the name "The Top Dog' which was one that I used to describe him/her in one of my answers yesterday. Yes, it's been lifted. If you were me would...
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    Does the form of this poem (villanelle) clash with its topic?

    The answer to your question is no. I believe that the repetition adds to the "heaviness" of the subject matter. Good to see you posting again.
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    Does the form of this poem (villanelle) clash with its topic?

    The answer to your question is no. I believe that the repetition adds to the "heaviness" of the subject matter. Good to see you posting again.
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    Some Thoughts on This Milieu, C/C?

    I wonder whether kitty will come out to play. She does indeed have sharp claws. Her recent calling card on one of mine was one word - doggerel. I guess it could have been worse Anyway, I have enjoyed your work of art - I like your line - Your sudsy answers foam and lather - there is a great...
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    Another short piece of free verse, would you advise if you can improve it , thanks?

    A Measure of Comfort In her grief, weary from the wash of life's waves, she struggled to stay afloat. On a hook, forlorn, his navy bathrobe hanging where he'd left it. She took it, wrapped herself inside, collar up, and inhaled his essence.
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    A piece of free verse, would you help me to improve it please thanks?

    treasure in his personal effects a wallet well-worn brown leather ingrained with life she hesitated opened and found inside with new notes a name-band the one placed on her tiny wrist minutes after her birth he had treasured it for thirty-nine years she swallowed her sadness and felt so valued...
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    Could I have your suggestions please to improve this short piece of free verse,

    thank you? Still experimenting with different forms Dyslexic grip i captured dissappointment and held it in my eye saw clear its choked expression let out a strangled cry so offered him my shoulder to ease his injured pride and told him that i loved him while all his hope then died Oh yes...
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    Can someone, please help me with line breaks and punctuation for my free...

    ...verse, thank you? Still inspired by Lovechild's question on pain, trying to experiment A bronze coin dropped inside the slot registered in my mind the thinking deep made me weep solutions I can't find a hidden hell too sore to tell is buried with the years alongside dreams of hopeless...
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    Have any of you heard of a poetry book "A Glass Half Full" by Felix Dennis?

    This is a poet, (I think he is British) now in his 60's who is also a rich business man. I bought this book earlier this week and just love some of his stuff. He has homes in New York as well as London. If you do know of him, what is your favourite poem by him? This is an example of his work...
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    Would you like to visit my garden? Comments and critique welcome, thanks?

    Our cherry tree's pink petal fall Drifts lightly over garden wall, And settles on the cold, damp ground, Sublime, in silence, not a sound. Magnolia my special treat, The creamy blooms blush, shy and sweet With centre stain a rich dark wine, At times a vision just divine. The trellis by the old...
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    Would you comment and critique on my revised poem please? thanks?

    Windsor Sleeps A mist has crept and crawled its way across the fields to Eton's bank, to where our craft is safely moored by tow path route, sop wet and dank. The haze stops short of river near as amber rays of rippled light, shoot from the lamps on waters edge to thrust and strike like...
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    Out-of-Season Poetry..................c/c?

    Hello Sin, she says with a lump in her throat and a tear in her eye after watching this. Miss your poetry on this site
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    We are poets....are we cowards with creative masks?

    Not in my book, I am no coward and neither do I hide behind a creative mask anymore. Although, it could be said I did once upon a time, for fear of being ridiculed for my poetic efforts. I stand in front of the curtain nowadays, not behind it
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    This is a reposting of my deleted poem, please can you help me to improve it. Thanks?

    A single tear tripped down his cheek And perched itself on tip of lip. He knew that I had seen it run, So came out with a shotgun quip "The smoke from fire, caused eyes to smart" I said to him "There is no fire". The honest truth he would not give What more from him could I enquire? Born in a...
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