Does the form of this poem (villanelle) clash with its topic?

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BlueFeather

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I sincerely want to know how others perceive it. Is a villanelle too "light" a form for the "heaviness" of this subject matter?


Battered Woman

It was as if no crime occurred
On that or any other day
To one whose pleas were seldom heard.

When they believed his every word
In spite of what she had to say
It was as if no crime occurred.

She begged that charges be preferred
But ears of most were turned away
From one whose pleas were seldom heard.

Her body's never been interred
And no one's yet been made to pay.
It was as if no crime occurred.

With time the truth's becoming blurred
And we may never know the way
Of one whose pleas were seldom heard.

Though some consider it absurd
And deem it little more than play
It was as if no crime occurred
To one whose pleas were seldom heard.
 
The answer to your question is no. I believe that the repetition adds to the "heaviness" of the subject matter. Good to see you posting again.
 
The answer to your question is no. I believe that the repetition adds to the "heaviness" of the subject matter. Good to see you posting again.
 
it has meaning and it's very deep yet not that you feel too sad.
I think it makes the poem even better because you wrote it this way!!
My only criticism would be that you... heck!! I got no criticism it was great!!
thanks for the wonderful read
 
I think not, I believe the repetition in a villanelle actually emphasizes the point and makes it stronger,
that is my personal opinion only,

remember some battered women never speak up, some are battered emotionally which is in a way more insidious as it is not evident to the naked eye or the observer. The victim covers well before they finally snap
 
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