Your Opinins on my poem. 10 points?

anonymous

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it doesnt have to rhyme. its free verse. theme:being proud of who you are. its for school

If You Know
I come from that quiet town, in front of that baseball field.
But if you know me that well, you would know.
That im from the city with the boisterous el trains that occasionally pass by too.

I come from the most worrisome Mother, and the most strict Father.
But if you know me that well, you would know. That through their never ending quarrels from the past, I know all they want for me is happiness.

I’ve seen the look on your face when you see the way I treat my siblings and parents. In such rotten manners and the vulgar attitude.
But if you know me that well, you would know. That I just don’t have that audacity to treat them the way I really feel.

I am a tad bit feisty, with one horrible temper, with the least bit patience.
But if you know me that well, you would know. That I am the most sporadic person you’d ever possibly find . And I am much more sincere, you see.

I’ve seen you nod in dismay, by the mishaps that occur in my life.
But if you know me that well, you would know.
That I proudly smile at these mishaps.

I’ve seen you laugh, thinking I’d never learn from my mishaps.
But if you know me that well, you would know.
That for me, it takes exactly twice to learn my lessons.

You might know, that I have three dogs and much much more.
But if you know me that well, you would know.
That my dogs are not dogs, but rather sisters and brothers that I call family.

You might expect me to know nothing of my future, thinking I am always living in the present.
Thinking I probably might not be giving the slightest care in the world.
But if you know me that well, you would know.
That I’ve been secretly planning the rest of my life all along.

You see, If you really knew me, I think you’d feel a bit sorry.
For thinking the thoughts you might have thought.
Now Each day, ill be living my life as I plan.
So I will continue to cease until death, just like Walt Whitman said he would
 
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