Writing a poem/song, any ideas? Name or more verses? Any changes to suggest?

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no name yet, but here it is

Many days have passed
And I’m still hooked on lies
The question still remains
Why did you say goodbye?

I’m still hooked on…
Lies…Lies…Lies!

Did forever mean to you
Only a day or two
Forever meant to me
That we were meant to be

Did forever come and go?
Or was it just a show?
Was it all a lie?
Did you always mean… goodbye?
slight addition

Was forever just a word?
The answers still unheard
I'm getting over you
Slowly, but its true
 
I think its really good. I would add another stanza to it~
so it doesn't end with a question.....such as:

Guess I'm sure to learn
from this forever love thats gone
Just how to play this game
and then just to carry on.

ok, just a suggestion, but I really like ur poem~
 
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