would you rate my poem?

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eMrOn.... yeah...

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since you left here,
some things i never forget.
like a drawer full of memories,
or a pocket full of regret.

a change in the weather
one last longing glance
one meaningless hug
and my one last chance

to tell you the truth
and defeat the lies
the lies of inside of me
and my voices desperate cry

for freedom, the truth
clutching on to the few
words i can say
ive completely fallen for you.
 
I take it you wrote it for someone you like, if you did that is so cute!
I really like it, it may need a few changes here and there but apart from that I'd give it a 10/10 and ............a star :)
 
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