Would someone ensure that this poem is true to villanelle form?

GAGIRL

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It appears the day's activities have been touched by a grander hand.
Children had been laughing and playing earlier in the day.
The surf is calm and quiet, as it laps against the sand.

People walking to and fro along the beach, all tanned.
Building sand castles, throwing frisbees, riding the surf, whatever they may.
It appears the day's activities have been touched by a grander hand.

Happiness has been un-canned
It truly has been a glorious day.
The surf is calm and quiet, as it laps against the sand.

The tide's ebb and flow sounds like a percussion band,
Wish we could enjoy this sound all day.
It appears the day's activities have been touched by a grander hand.

The clouds have disappeared, the sights are much more bland.
The sun becomes a gentle giant, with each fleeting ray.
The surf is calm and quiet, as it laps against the sand.

To stand and gaze across the ocean, amazed at this breathtaking land
The gulls skim the water, as the sand crabs scurry away
It appears the day's activities have been touched by a grander hand.
The surf is calm and quiet, as it laps against the sand.
 
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