(jean is comming out of a cool airport and the heat of the weather is overwhelming, she is in a tropical humid country)
Jean felt like a brick wall had slammed into her whole body. The heat of manila was too much for her as soon as she stepped out of the cool airport. She fanned herself using her hand. She forgot how hard it was to breathe such humid weather. Jean blotted her melting makeup as she looked around noticing everyone behind the gates staring. Old men were smiling at her some were even taking pictures.
(rewrite this and win) or tips?
Jean felt like a brick wall had slammed into her whole body. The heat of manila was too much for her as soon as she stepped out of the cool airport. She fanned herself using her hand. She forgot how hard it was to breathe such humid weather. Jean blotted her melting makeup as she looked around noticing everyone behind the gates staring. Old men were smiling at her some were even taking pictures.
(rewrite this and win) or tips?