What's worse: a hypocrite or a prima donna?

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Daddys Little Princess

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Who wants to be the lesser of two evils anyway?
Fronts are battle-lines, and victory is day to day.
Duel-natures and pretty eyes, tongues and confidence;
The weapons of the modern feminist warrior.
But I question: what worth is battling,
When the battle is for the proof of
Some convoluted point that never existed?

Ultimately, her claims are fictitious
But she strives for guilt nonetheless

The claim! the claim! the claim!
Is that if he respects another man then he is hurtful
The claim! the claim! the claim!
Is that she must clearly wrap her limbs in red

This is the result of medication
Where counseling could so easily be substituted
 
Thanks for the feedback, as usual. :mad:

And background:
Two female frienRAB of mine that I'm really good frienRAB with are cheating on two male frienRAB of mine that I'm also good frienRAB with, but haven't known as long.

Female friend A told on female friend B to female friend B's boyfriend, but then less than two months later is doing the same thing, with a guy she literally called me crying about at least 6 times over the past two years.

Female friend B keeps harassing one of my best frienRAB, and is totally using her boyfriend to get back at him because he likes her but won't date her because she's insane, so she keeps harassing him and he's not responding, and now she's texting him about how she's cutting all the time... this girl is turning 21 soon.

I'm kind of ashamed that I was ever close to these over-dramatic whores basically.
 
hmmmmmm thats a hug problem witht his forum Everyone is posting poems and not critiquing them. When they do critique, it seems they are usually boosting their ego or putting you down.

Ill come back to this tomorrow when I can give it an honest read. Let me know what I can do to improve on my poetry as well, it would be much appreciated.
 
Flow is F'in superb. Like how you show that fighting for one side (or one idea) leaRAB you too be blind (and short sighted). This ultimately leaRAB us to fighting one another and stabbing eachother. Many artists touch on this, its universally talked about. I like it, it feels finished and well written. Ideas ring true, word choice fits perfect with the poem.

One of my favorites I have read lately.
 
Fuck women, man. They're all exactly the same. The essentials of valor and truth are lost on every last one of those honorless swine.

:chug:
 
see in this case i dont even think its anybody fucking with other people's minRAB

i think it's minRAB that are already fucked trying to interact with minRAB that aren't fucked
 
Certainly what your buddies did was bullshit, but that's the logic of stupid people not the logic of women as a whole.
It's easy to fall into writing really macho stuff, it's a simple way to sound gritty or callous or whatever. You can't write a poem about two stupid women (if you bring up the fact that they're women) without having to contend with issues of sexism. Whether you want to come off that way or not, it's gonna come up in interpretation. Just be sure that you're making a statement with intention, whatever that statement might be.
 
It was the little "modern feminist warrior" bit that makes it come off that way. I don't give a hoot what you write about bro, just be aware.
 
It's more of a shot at the fact that these kind of girls act like if women are "liberated" then they should break down the barriers of "double standarRAB" about men and women in regarRAB to sex.

Even though that doesn't make sense evolutionarily, whatsoever, and they just end up psychologically damaging themselves.


Nope.

Also, 5 months in this drama's finally between two people only, I'm really impressed hahaha.
 
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