What story do you see this song telling in a lyrical dance?

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The song is At Seventeen by Jann Arden. And would it still make sense if I cut out the last two verses? Here are the lyrics:

I learned the truth at seventeen
That love was meant for beauty queens
And high school girls with clear skinned smiles
Who married young and then retired
The valentines I never knew
The Friday night charades of youth
Were spent on one more beautiful
At seventeen I learned the truth...

And those of us with ravaged faces
Lacking in the social graces
Desperately remained at home
Inventing lovers on the phone
Who called to say "come dance with me"
And murmured vague obscenities
It isn't all it seems at seventeen...

A brown eyed girl in hand me downs
Whose name I never could pronounce
Said: "Pity please the ones who serve
They only get what they deserve"
The rich relationed hometown queen
Marries into what she needs
With a guarantee of company
And haven for the elderly...

So remember those who win the game
Lose the love they sought to gain
In debitures of quality and dubious integrity
Their small-town eyes will gape at you
In dull surprise when payment due
Exceeds accounts received at seventeen...

To those of us who knew the pain
Of valentines that never came
And those whose names were never called
When choosing sides for basketball
It was long ago and far away
the world was younger than today
when dreams were all they gave for free
to ugly duckling girls like me...

We all play the game, and when we dare
We cheat ourselves at solitaire
Inventing lovers on the phone
Repenting other lives unknown
That call and say: "Come on, dance with me"
And murmur vague obscenities
At ugly girls like me, at seventeen...
 
I'm completely seeing a love tringle. Like, with everyone sort of upset because they think they're the one getting hurt the worst. Or just victims of a bad break up. People blaming their looks on their crummy love lives XD

And yeah, I don't think it'll matter too much if you cut out the last verses. The story you want to tell is in the dance and the movement. The music helps, but if the lyrics don't flow quite as perfectly as the original version (which they won't no matter what, if you're cutting the music. It's impossible to get it exactly perfect. Believe me, I've tried) then nobody's going to chase after you with a torch and pitchfork. Hopefully :)
 
The last two verses are fine; however, the third verse from the bottom messes with the flow because it gets too wordy. The picture I get is of some high school teenager who isn't humble by choice. She wishes to be like her more popular, beautiful, superficial colleagues because the life they lead isn't as socially-difficult/painful.
 
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