What say you to a small trigee poem?

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tori

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Trigee – Ages and Ages
By Victoria Tarrani
© 0906.30

knight of the day ………. daunting and honorable ……. aroused for the events
whispers tender words … his love will hold me safe ….. blade slides from the sheath
throughout the night …… vows love for life after life … gentle touch for we are one
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Tori, it is beautiful, serene, sensory, soft.....

only think I'd change,
is the word night on the left
find another word, since knight is already used

edit: now that i've re-read it a few times...i'm not sure of replacing the word after all.....still...it's lovely....
 
thanks for the answer on my question ;)

this is very beautiful
I love the imagry and my favourite line is "gentle touch for we are one"
I just love that line!

keep writing
its amazing :)
 
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