Sara Roberts
New member
I wrote a poem...and i got a comment on it saying "its good it just seems like you swich words and thoughts around just to make it rhyme"...well isn't that what poetry is..lol..just wondering if this was meant as an insult? or making fun?..lol..what do you guys think? lol i know alot of poetry doesn't always rhyme...but sometimes i like poems that rhyme..lmao..
ok so this is a poem..i did add my emotions and feelings in it..just made the words rhyme is all..lol..see if it's ok..
Lying awake, while I should be sleeping,
Should be happy, but can’t keep from weeping.
Can’t hardly breathe, as I think of you,
Gasping for air, feeling so blue.
My world seems to be falling apart,
I love you from the bottom of my heart.
Maybe it’s too quick, or maybe too fast,
But I hope this feeling will always last
Although it’s almost painful to feel such love,
I feel like flying away, as though I’m a graceful dove.
Nervous, shaky, yet my worries run dry,
Hoping I shall never have to say goodbye.
So take my hand and call me yours,
We can walk together, on the ocean shores.
Side by side, and a kiss after kiss,
How that would be, the sweetest bliss.
ok so this is a poem..i did add my emotions and feelings in it..just made the words rhyme is all..lol..see if it's ok..
Lying awake, while I should be sleeping,
Should be happy, but can’t keep from weeping.
Can’t hardly breathe, as I think of you,
Gasping for air, feeling so blue.
My world seems to be falling apart,
I love you from the bottom of my heart.
Maybe it’s too quick, or maybe too fast,
But I hope this feeling will always last
Although it’s almost painful to feel such love,
I feel like flying away, as though I’m a graceful dove.
Nervous, shaky, yet my worries run dry,
Hoping I shall never have to say goodbye.
So take my hand and call me yours,
We can walk together, on the ocean shores.
Side by side, and a kiss after kiss,
How that would be, the sweetest bliss.