What is your opinion of this poem?

Alyssa

New member
This poem has to be a quatrain, with a five syllable rhythm.
It also has to keep the same rhyme pattern.

Any suggestions to make it sound better?
And what would be a good title?

Our love was a song-
How we used to be.
You sang to me that
Short, sweet melody.

Our love was so strong-
It shone through your eyes.
But somehow I knew
That it would demise.

Our love then went wrong-
For you sang off tune.
You changed the words, so
It had to end soon.

Our love is now gone-
Your heart turned to stone.
The rhythm stopped, so
Now I sing alone.
 
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