What is your honest opinion of this poem, lol be brutal if you must.?

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your hypocritical ways are jaded
for i wish not to swallow your word
so upon me you spit your hatred
to me your words are seldom heard

you force your thoughts on civilization
slithering sliver tongues of dark deceit
perceiving us as a criminal organization
while you lay in your golden conceit

where your mouth opens bats fly from
your scheming false worshiped deities
i take each hit knowing where it has come
each word a lashing to my body from these

you and your cult flock from town to city
setting up your houses of back biting
asking for donations begging for our pity
and chastising our wars we're fighting

yet you drive the cause home to heart
as your lips smile heavy with greed
without a care as we are ripped apart
for money, to our safety it does superceed

so i chose to ignore your temples built of pain
for when each of your disciples do speak
it slowly turns my mind towards the insane
wishing to make each one of you reap

spilling our nations blood years over
the wrongs you cause and shove deep
and you drink your wine as we're sober
the drops that fall to the ground now seep

into the waterways of or poor countries mind
and now it is truly futile to try to resist you
no matter what, there will always be your kind
so there is nothing that i could ever hope to do

-------I Give Up---------
wow i think you took part of the brutality! haha


it's really good... nice choice of words and very thorough. I didn't really understand "spilling our nations blood years over" part though. I guess I'm not sure who this poem is direct towards, but it's good."

the spilling the blood is directed towards religions, most major wars are because of being driven by religion,...
 
it's kinda hard to follow... and its really dark
but i mean if thats what you're aiming for then its not bad
i like the metaphors and what not though
 
wow i think you took part of the brutality! haha


it's really good... nice choice of words and very thorough. I didn't really understand "spilling our nations blood years over" part though. I guess I'm not sure who this poem is direct towards, but it's good.
 
We're no strangers to love
You know the rules and so do I
A full commitment's what I'm thinking of
You wouldn't get this from any other girl

I just wanna tell you how I'm feeling
Gotta make you understand

Never gonna give you up, never gonna let you down
Never gonna run around and desert you
Never gonna make you cry, never gonna say goodbye
Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you

We've known each other for so long
Your heart's been aching but you're too shy to say it
Inside we both know what's been going on
We know the game and we're gonna play it

And if you ask me how I'm feeling
Don't tell me you're too blind to see

Never gonna give you up, never gonna let you down
Never gonna run around and desert you
Never gonna make you cry, never gonna say goodbye
Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you

Never gonna give you up, never gonna let you down
Never gonna run around and desert you
Never gonna make you cry, never gonna say goodbye
Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you

(Ooh... give you up)
(Ooh... give you up)
(Ooh...) never gonna give, never gonna give (give you up)
(Ooh...) never gonna give, never gonna give (give you up)

We've known each other for so long
Your heart's been aching but you're too shy to say it
Inside we both know what's been going on
We know the game and we're gonna play it

I just wanna tell you how I'm feeling
Gotta make you understand

Never gonna give you up, never gonna let you down
Never gonna run around and desert you
Never gonna make you cry, never gonna say goodbye
Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you

Never gonna give you up, never gonna let you down
Never gonna run around and desert you
Never gonna make you cry, never gonna say goodbye
Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you

Never gonna give you up, never gonna let you down
Never gonna run around and desert you
Never gonna make you cry, never gonna say goodbye
Never gonna tell a lie and hurt you
 
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