What is ur opinion on this poem!!!! Be honest!!!!!?

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Andy

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The Top of the Montain (titile)

And the heaven’s let out thy sorrow,
For tomorrow, there would not be
And he, who took thy lead,
Grabbed his noble stead, and rode,
For this their last abode.

He started with a quickened haste,
Quickly picking up the pace,
Had his goals on his mind,
They wouldn’t be left behind.

He was better than the best,
Stronger than the rest,
More determined then them all.

But his time had passed,
He just couldn’t last.

The best of the best.
 
more determined "than" them all

Hey I think anyone that writes actual poetry is cool. Poetry represents humans reaching for higher refinement and consciousness. And the true interpretation of the words is only known to the writer. Your poem is cool...but it does depend on where you want to expose it...if you do want to expose it.....what I mean is it probably wouldn't get rave reception in a "Beat" poet format(kerouac,etc..) or at Slam poetry which I personal can't stand...but it looks like a heartfelt effort to me and I always like real stuff,words with heart. Keep writing!
 
more determined "than" them all

Hey I think anyone that writes actual poetry is cool. Poetry represents humans reaching for higher refinement and consciousness. And the true interpretation of the words is only known to the writer. Your poem is cool...but it does depend on where you want to expose it...if you do want to expose it.....what I mean is it probably wouldn't get rave reception in a "Beat" poet format(kerouac,etc..) or at Slam poetry which I personal can't stand...but it looks like a heartfelt effort to me and I always like real stuff,words with heart. Keep writing!
 
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