What do you think of this work in progress? should i quit while I'm ahead?

cmg

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It's a very rough draft! its something that my brain blurted out... so here we go...

Amando …. I Could make you richer than in your wildest dreams” A thin middle aged man whispered To him. The inside of Amando’s ears tickled from the words of the Cartel. Amando quickly shrugged of Emilio’s Hand that he had place on his Right shoulder. He could feel his jaw clenching in irritation. “ You know nothing of my dreams Emilio, and I will not have garbage such as you polluting my beautiful city of San Cristobal,” he declared. Emilio clicked his tounge like a mother scorning a child. “ Amando- beloved one, your mother is from England, I know she has told you it is not polite to call people names,” Emilio said smugly. “ I believe, for you Emilio she would make, and exception,” he said with udder distain. Emilio laughed dryly at his opponent’s dig. You know your father, and I are more similar more than you are welling to accept, we both started out with nothing, and now look at what we have now, we both are well respected businessmen,” Emilio was interrupted by the younger man’s scoff. “ There is nothing respectable about what you do,” Amando replied. Anger now Growing in his voice. Emilio simply shrugged his shoulders, and smirked.



Thank you to all who answer =D
 
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