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VampyChick
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I wanted it to keep it short and to the point. Yes, obviously the book is a vampire one and you're probably tired of all the vampire author wannabes, but hey, people love their vampires 
I'm not too crazy about it myself, but I didn't want to make it one of those generic scenes where the vampire takes an unsuspecting victim. But, somehow, I think it came out kind of generic sounding. Eh, maybe unavoidable?
Keep in mind, I'm not asking what you think I should do with it, if I did that, it wouldn't be MY writing. And also, I'm not asking you to point out grammical errors.
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Life, the quality that makes living animals and plants different from dead organisms and inorganic matter. Its functions include the ability to take in food, adapt to the environment, grow, and reproduce.
Death, the ending of all vital functions or processes in an organism.
That’s simple enough to understand, at least until you through in beliefs and religions, but I’m not here to dispute the many differing faiths. My inquisition rests in borderlines between life and death. Ridiculous, I know. I myself use to have little patience for such improbable notions such as a line between life and death. There was just one or the other, not even something to separate the two since they are so closely tied together. They are one and the same, life causes death, death causes life. There was nothing else. Or, at least that’s what I believed, some people had other thoughts, however.
The undead, in fiction, especially vampire stories, people or other beings who are technically dead but still exist, move, and interact with the living in a physical form.
Utterly absurd. How anyone could ever believe such nonsense had been beyond me. A vampire, a child of the night, a being that feeds on the living to sustain its own immortal state of eternal youth, surely that is too farfetched for anyone to truly believe.
I know I’d scoff at such an idea if my heart was still beating.
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Hit or miss, my dears?
P.S. Don't give me rude comments if you think it sucks, just say you don't like it, state the reason why if you are so inclined (and said reason should not be such things as "it sucks" or anything to that effect), and be on your way
I'm not too crazy about it myself, but I didn't want to make it one of those generic scenes where the vampire takes an unsuspecting victim. But, somehow, I think it came out kind of generic sounding. Eh, maybe unavoidable?
Keep in mind, I'm not asking what you think I should do with it, if I did that, it wouldn't be MY writing. And also, I'm not asking you to point out grammical errors.
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Life, the quality that makes living animals and plants different from dead organisms and inorganic matter. Its functions include the ability to take in food, adapt to the environment, grow, and reproduce.
Death, the ending of all vital functions or processes in an organism.
That’s simple enough to understand, at least until you through in beliefs and religions, but I’m not here to dispute the many differing faiths. My inquisition rests in borderlines between life and death. Ridiculous, I know. I myself use to have little patience for such improbable notions such as a line between life and death. There was just one or the other, not even something to separate the two since they are so closely tied together. They are one and the same, life causes death, death causes life. There was nothing else. Or, at least that’s what I believed, some people had other thoughts, however.
The undead, in fiction, especially vampire stories, people or other beings who are technically dead but still exist, move, and interact with the living in a physical form.
Utterly absurd. How anyone could ever believe such nonsense had been beyond me. A vampire, a child of the night, a being that feeds on the living to sustain its own immortal state of eternal youth, surely that is too farfetched for anyone to truly believe.
I know I’d scoff at such an idea if my heart was still beating.
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Hit or miss, my dears?
P.S. Don't give me rude comments if you think it sucks, just say you don't like it, state the reason why if you are so inclined (and said reason should not be such things as "it sucks" or anything to that effect), and be on your way