What do you think of this Poem?

[flyersflames]

When time goes by in the blink of an eye,
Wonder why and how the loss of you blows my mind.
Regrets take control and i feel like everything was a lie.
Things happened, words used, all because I was in a bind.
I didn't know who I was.
I didn't know what happened to me.
I use to be there for you when nobody else was.
When I try to talk to you all I can do is flee,
from the problems that we caused.
I open my eyes and time seems to slow
I see who I was and who I am now
Is it to late for me to show,,
that I can be me and I can be good.
Don't give up on me, please, you mean too much to me
This is not about a girlfriend. This is about a best friend. I don't think i should give it to her but what do you think

 

[kleptomanic sheep]

ok...as poetry, it could be better. you've used words for the sake of rhyme - "i was in a bind" being a point in case. try to avoid this. you've got an unfixed rythym and rhyme scheme - are you using one or not? reread, rework. try reading up on soem poetic forms and choose one which might fit - freeform is always tricky to do well.

as a message to a friend...that's entirely up to you and how you think she would react. sometimes the people who inspire poems should remain unaware of the fact, for the best; other times, it might help the situation.