What do you think of this poem?

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This is my friend poem that she wrote. Do you think it is any good? For me, I thought it was okay. I told her it almost look like a long sentence that she wrote to make it into this poem. I don't know how to feel about this poem. What do you think? Also, could you give me any suggestions for a title that fits this poem? (She wants me to give her a title)

In the dead silent night
I feel lonely, yet alive
Lying for hours and hours
Minutes to seconds, seconds to minutes
Thinking and wondering
If I took one last breath
One last thought
Deeply into myself
Closing my eyes slowly
Will I ever come back
To who I was yesterday
Until now and tomorrow.
 
should the title be...if i? idk i just made sumin up. i really did like this poem cuz it has a good core. it can be fixed a lil bit but not the whole thing cuz i like wat it says but u can change it just a lil. tell ur frend i said great job!!!
 
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