what do you think of this poem?

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Sarah

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honest feedback plz! any feedback helps me! thx!

My cheeks streaked with tears
As I stare at the mirror
A girl that I don’t know
Her face is all that shows
Her weakness showing through
All I knew was you
Your voice your words your love
Holding on was tough
But I held, forever it seemed
Before you let go of me
 
Your poem bores me.

The free verse usage, if used properly, can create beautiful poems. However, here, it's boring me. I can't invison the scene, and there for, it's not a poem I enjoy.

Try being more descriptive next time.

1/10.
 
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