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kim_mance
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This is my first real attempt at writing a poem and I'm looking for some feedback, and any suggestions for a title? thanks!
There is a place between God and Time,
Where the eyes see but do not know,
Where the ears are filled with noise but do not hear,
A place of numbing dumbness; mere existence,
To walk would be to fall.
To fall away from the place that so many call home,
Into the deadening darkness, into the stillness.
You can not listen to the stars on a cloudy night
And too soon without reason the tears have begun to fall.
There is a place between God and Time,
Where the eyes see but do not know,
Where the ears are filled with noise but do not hear,
A place of numbing dumbness; mere existence,
To walk would be to fall.
To fall away from the place that so many call home,
Into the deadening darkness, into the stillness.
You can not listen to the stars on a cloudy night
And too soon without reason the tears have begun to fall.