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Zoe
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Hey, I've written this poem and i really want some constructive criticism on it. And also can you please tell me some ideas for a title. Here it is:
She just can’t let go
And he doesn’t know why
It haunts her still today
she would rather die.
He knows she was hurt
The face is usually unknown
They remember the little things
His hands, the smell of his cologne.
It had ever crossed his mind
That she knows exactly who it is
He never asks, he’s here and will protect her
And the past, well that’s none of his business.
She wakes up crying every so often
In the middle of the night
He stays up until the crying stops
And everything is somewhat alright.
She doesn’t expect him to make it all better
Or be superman and save the day
Honestly he’s doing fine
Just wiping the tears away.
Fear, Hate and Insecurity
Are the only emotions in her eyes
Who knew he could figure it all out
Simply by the way she cries.
Thanks XD
She just can’t let go
And he doesn’t know why
It haunts her still today
she would rather die.
He knows she was hurt
The face is usually unknown
They remember the little things
His hands, the smell of his cologne.
It had ever crossed his mind
That she knows exactly who it is
He never asks, he’s here and will protect her
And the past, well that’s none of his business.
She wakes up crying every so often
In the middle of the night
He stays up until the crying stops
And everything is somewhat alright.
She doesn’t expect him to make it all better
Or be superman and save the day
Honestly he’s doing fine
Just wiping the tears away.
Fear, Hate and Insecurity
Are the only emotions in her eyes
Who knew he could figure it all out
Simply by the way she cries.
Thanks XD