What do you think of this poem, an epic poem made my our very own Y!A poets?

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A reddened shadow lay upon the water
as evidence of an impending slaughter
In the reflected glow of dusk aesthete's fodder.
The Sun descends below the Golden the Earth
Night rises devoid of mirth
Old Country Buffet has widened my girth
Feel as though I may soon emplode


A reddened shadow lay upon the water
as evidence of an impending slaughter
In the reflected glow of dusk aesthete's fodder.
The Sun descends below the Golden the Earth
----Night rises devoid of mirth
Old Country Buffet has widened my girth

Feel as though I may soon implode
Woe is me, to have to carry such a heavy load
By light of moon what creatures’ prowl
Undistinguished by grunt or growl
But then potato rapes my foot.
As sausage slithers past my lips


Back to the lake of imminent slaughter
Crossed over by Lord Ullan's daughter.
Across the chasm in two small jumps
and I am in love with the rolling earth
While upon my Harley, wind in my hair,
----I gave birth to a dream
And I woke up with a ghastly scream
O Please, Mother of us all, never reject my dream

To your hardened skin


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I had asked an earlier question for the Yahoo Answers Poets to contribute one line to the first Yahoo Answers epic poem and this is the result. I did not change a thing as far as format and the lines=]


What do you think?
 
This is not an "epic" poem. Epic poems are MUCH longer, as in book length. See The Iliad, The Odyssey, The Aeneid, Dante's Divine Comedy. The fact it was coordinated to be written by several different writers is impressive.
 
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