what do you think of this poem?? 10 points!!!?

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Sarah

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And what title do u think I should use?

Why do i do this?
Why am I afraid?
Why do I find it so hard?
To say what I need to say?

Why do I feel this way?
Why do I act this way?
Why do we push ourselves?
Why do we treat people this way?

Why is the question,
That we all ask,
Why is the question,
That no one seems to know!

Are the answers to these questions?
Better unknown?
Are the questions?
Unknown?

Why do we do these things?
Why do we always ask?
What would we be?
If only we knew!

What are all the questions for?
Why do we want to know?
Why can't we just accept?
That they are simply unknown!
I just made it up on the spot and I want to get some reviews on it!!!
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This is pretty good. I often write poems asking alot of questions and i get critcism saying i should try to answer them not keep asking more. but i get that your expressing your ignorance and maybe the whole worlds ignorance at these questions. great job!

As for the title, "why is the question" or maybe just "why"

Comment on mine?
http://answers.yahoo.com/question/index;_ylt=ApnrV8XTk0GdP5E0yG19GtTsy6IX;_ylv=3?qid=20090924002608AASMoFA
 
it should be called "why do we ask" or "why do we care"
or "questions" or "the unthinkable Questions" or simply "Why"

sounds kind of funny
 
its great i really like it!
you could call it
unknown
why
why is it?

i don't know. take your fav line from it and make that the heading.
i have a suggestion.
when you say
are the questions?
unknown?
ig doesn't really make sence you could say
are questions,
unknown

i find that there sin't really a definite rhythm to all of it but there is a rhythm half the time so you need to make a discison.
over all i think you are really talented.
good job. keep working on it, you'll be a famouse poet one day. :)
 
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