what do you think of this emo poem?

[melissa]

I just wrote this emo poem, what do you think of it?

back to fix

just leave and ill remember
the shell of what you once were
and what was
all the happiness
in my life
and then ill remember
all the memories
as they will never fade
no matter how much i want them to
they'll just become pain filled memories
i sit here writing this
in hope that
maybe one day
youll realize what damage youve done
and come back
back to fix all the pain and suffering
back to fix a damaged heart
back to fix all the depression and despair

what do you think of it? any comments? or anything to make it better at all?

 

[YooHoo]

It's nice other than the fact that ist depressing.

 

[Rich G]

I think it's great the way it is. I can also relate to this, as I believe others will as well. Great word use and description of feelings.