What do you think of these poems i just wrote?

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Okay, so right now, it's 4am where i am, and i was laying here trying to fall asleep, but i randomly starting writing poems in my head, so i had to write them down. Tell me what you think? Honesty would be appreciated.

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They're all deceived with lies
And a tattooed smile.
If only they knew,
Or paid attention once and a while.
Everyone watches,
As she digs her own grave,
Not even realizing
The mistakes being made.
Blood pulses through her veins
Just waiting to escape
She just wishes,
Her life was in better shape.
She can't take anymore.
She finally breaks down.
Now she's covered in blood.
Lying face down.


The Final Vanishing Act
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Ladies and gentleman!
Come, gather 'round!
Look what you've done
I've had enough
This just isn't fun.
For my final act,
My very last one,
Just look me in the eyes
As I fire the gun
Feel the pain that I did,
And what's about to come.
As I, the great enchantress
Am about to do --
My Final Vanishing Act.
Actually, im not really depressed at all.
I just usually write poems to vent, so they usually turn out sad or something.
I am in no way considering suicide.
But thanks for the concern(:
 
I have never anyone use such grace and beauty with the written word. If you aren't an author, you are depriving many generations of literature that should be endlessly lauded and praised. Do us all a favor and make sure you further pursue writing - it would be a disservice to us all if you didn't.
 
Quality aside, it's quite sad that these thoughts are in your mind. Don't worry, high school doesn't last forever, trust me.
 
As poems they are really quite dreadful. However as an expression of emotion they are quite worrying. You seem to be feeling really low. Early morning waking is a sign. Maybe you need to seek help for depression.
 
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