what do you think of the poem i made?

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rissa

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this deep depression never ends
the day you left me left a dent
you don’t even notice you’ve changed
yet leaving another range
all the jokes we share
another day, yes i did care
ignoring me all the time
don’t even see if i’m fine
still not knowing what i did
aren’t we suppose to be a kid
dealing with all this hate
why am i such a piece of bait
 
it's short and a little bit scattered but your emotion really shows in it. you are angry and hurt, from what i see by love. it seems to say that you feel used and upset that nothing seems to work out. i like it.
 
That is exactly how I feel about some friends I lost from my childhood.We used to be unseprable but they changed in High school and they started acting like I didn't exist (6 of them altogether).And I hated it!

This poem is touching and I can clearly see it was wrote from the heart,and personly I think those are the best type of poems.
 
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