What do you think of my poem?

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I am a little rusty, but here it is. It's called "A SECOND"

A SECOND

A small,
Fracture of time,
Yet, hollowed out,
Ringing and tolling
The bells of pain
And laughter.
A space,
Between time
With little room
For a whisper,
A rumor,
Or a kiss.
A second,
The smallest measure
With the greatest meaning.
A second.



Thoughtful critiscms, no meanies :) OR STEALING!
I want to publish this to Teen Ink. Is it good?
 
Mine is better.

How do I tell you?
How can I say how I feel?
No man can defy my feelings,
No words can describe it enough,
My feelings will never die out,
My flame will always burn for you,
When we first met I was scared,
I never thought that you could be the one,
I see you, now for who you really are,
I try to find some sort of flaw,
Still searching I can’t recovery one,
A rose with flaws are common,
With petals that are chipped, and broken,
But a rose without flaws is rare,
Every petal the same as the last,
You are my perfect rose,
The rarest of all people known to man,
I may have just stumbled upon you,
Now that I found you, I’m never letting go,
How do I tell you?
How do I say what I feel?
I guess like this,
I love you.
 
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