what do you think of my poem?

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JustinaSayWhat

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tell me what you think please, good or bad. won't hurt my feelings.
if you really like it, ask and i'll post this website where i keep all of my poetry. only if you like it....


[I'm not here]
life lost in drugs, booze and razorblades
bloodshot eyes, forgotten memories, and scars that will never fade.
the pain in this body is never relieved,
and i've murdered morals in which i once believed.
the person i used to be died a long time ago
overdosed on pills during her lowest of lows.
now i go on searching for the cure,
the remedy to my empty heart i keep obscure.
so i try my damnedness to fill the spaces
with alcohol, drugs, and intoxicated faces,
but no matter how many drunken nights and one time lovers
i'll always be alone under the covers
and the loneliness i cannot stand,
so i take every drug and liquor in the land,
i slit my wrist and let the blood fall to the floor.
and one night when you knock upon my door
i just might not answer anymore...
 
i think it's very powerful. very good word usage. sounds like a rap i think. like, when i was reading this i could hear a beat in the background in my head. I think your troubles in your life have empowered you and inspired you to be a great poet. no matter how dark and sad a poem might be, its still art and its still a piece of you coming through. Great job
 
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