What do you think of my poem?

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Peter

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And a sip from a drink....
Drown my misery
make it sink..
And your summer Love.
That's the worst thought in the world.
But can you reveal the story??
Make it unfold?
And Cupid with his arrows...
They just go shooting people and flying around...
And just all those couples,
It makes me frown..
Go die from those arrows.
THEN GO DROWN.
And you.. with your girlfriend.
What exactly do you want me to do?
Just pretend???
Well
I can't.
I won't.
I refuse to.
Only one thing left to say,
Screw you.....
 
Okay it was all great until the end...its a little harsh. It had a great flow to it, but the "screw you" think just sort of threw it off...how about, "im done with you", or, "I'll miss you", or, "Forget you"? I loved it up until tht part. but other than tht, it was great! Nice jobb. (:
 
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