What do you think of my poem?

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The mirrors are laughing at her
Screeching in her face

The t.v. is smiling, as it watches her lift the blade
Hollywood is cackling, satisfaction grazing their features

Just one less ugly thing in this f*cked-up world
Because beauty is the only escape

She's ignored by the boys
With a face only a mother could love

And her heart drops every time she sees herself
Because she knows it won't be long

So she waits, sits, hoping for a miracle
Something that she knew wouldn't come

Time is passing, life is wasting
She is becoming ugly dust

Knowing her dreams will never come true
With a curse like this

She lifts the blade
And the world smiles

Her face is slashed to pieces, she doesn't want them to see
Her family's heart is shattered

Lying in her casket, just as ugly as ever
Her heart no longer has to feel that pain, just one less ugly thing

And the world smiles
Let peace fill her lonely soul

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I know it's really stupid, sad, and emo-ish (even though I'm not emo), but what do you think? How do you interpret it?
 
i think its too long, a poem should be interpreted by the state of mind and by what they infer from words of the poem. its good, but its too straight. i mean, it doesnt get you thinking, try and make it less wordy and more mysterious
 
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