What do you think of my poem?

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la..da..da..la...
my heart sings to the music
around me.
my heart dances to the words
that escape my lips.
my hair swirls around me
in joy,
as i dance to the music around me.
 
Well, it's not very long, or detailed, it's not very descriptive.. it doesn't seem to have much of a theme, but music... Short poems are okay but poems are supposed to be interesting to read. I cannot relate to this in anyway.. The rhythm is okay.. but the poem is a little common and unnoriginal, if that makes sense because the lyrics of very simple.
It was okay though.
 
Well, it's not very long, or detailed, it's not very descriptive.. it doesn't seem to have much of a theme, but music... Short poems are okay but poems are supposed to be interesting to read. I cannot relate to this in anyway.. The rhythm is okay.. but the poem is a little common and unnoriginal, if that makes sense because the lyrics of very simple.
It was okay though.
 
Well, it's not very long, or detailed, it's not very descriptive.. it doesn't seem to have much of a theme, but music... Short poems are okay but poems are supposed to be interesting to read. I cannot relate to this in anyway.. The rhythm is okay.. but the poem is a little common and unnoriginal, if that makes sense because the lyrics of very simple.
It was okay though.
 
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