what do you think of my poem/sonnet?

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WellyBoot

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we were asked to write a sonnet in english last year and i just came across mine today and thought i'd ask you good people for your opinions :)

Photograph

Your features, perfect angle light and shade,
Take me far back to a lost memory,
Stored in the back of my mind out of sight.
You whisper its existence silently,
Nothing of value to a stranger, you
Intrigued with your beauty, no more, no less,
But for those who know you, have lived you too
And see what beauty lies beneath your dress.
A photograph that’s captured every part;
Emotion, picture, colour, memories
And me, the memories, captured my heart
With one quick motion, you capture with ease.
A photograph that’s captured every part,
With one quick motion you captured my heart.

thanks, any criticism will be graciously accepted :)
 
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