What do you think of my poem (rough draft), all comments welcome.?

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Mike

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Lost Life

Wandering the cross roads not knowing where to turn.
Up one hill, finish one battle, then one more.
Never ending.

Which way to go.
No one answers.
Which way to turn,
Silence.

Have I got it right this time?
Is this my path in life?
So many questions not enough answers,
Confusion.

Is she the one I love?
Is this the job for me?
Is he my friend?
Is she for real?
Who knows?

No answers, more questions.
I guess life is just a journey to get lost on.
But are we ever found?
I need to know but never will,
Not until.
Too late.
 
Its really good. You have a future of a poet. I will be your first buyer. I really liked it i hope you had fun making it



p.s- are you sure you are not a poet oh come on
 
Wanderin' the cross roads,
not knowin' where to turn
Up one hill and down another
there's still more to come

Which way to go?
No one answers
Which way to turn?
I'll toss a coin

Do I have it right?
Is this my path in life?
So many questions
Not enough answers
Nothing but confusion

Is she the one for me?
Is this guy friend or foe?
Is this job right for me?
How can I really know?
I'll have to wait to see....

No answers but more questions
Life is just a journey into the unknown
If we get lost,
Are we ever found?
This I need to know,
Before it's too late.
 
Wonderful poem. Beautiful thoughts. Especially like the placement of the word " Silence". Enjoy your writing and good luck!
 
it is gooood. i tend to be more into detail when i write but theres alot of different ways to write, and it all depends on the person and whats going on in their head, how they think. your a good writer!(:
 
Wow, that was really good! I'm not just saying that to be nice, either. That was really thought provoking and made me think about myself. Superb use of language!
 
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