What do you think of my poem about a bad friendship?

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I just wrote this poem about the worst thing that just happened to me. I need your opinions and suggestions on how to make this better. Thanks.

You ring me along
Into the depths of your insanity,
Penitence and I
Are the only things that don't
Cross your manipulative mind

I speak to you
But my voice is nearly the wind,
I poke your rough skin
But I am merely an insect

Writhe and burn
Friend you were
 
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