What do you think of my creative story for english? crits and comments pleaseee?

Mbardzzz

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Upon a Dreary morning, I awoke to find things had become quite different then what I had previously remembered. My bedroom was no longer in its previous state, instead it had become the realm of either a dream or a nightmare. Things were not quite as they seemed, the walls breathed and the floor and the ceiling had become a sea of flowing water. As I still sat there in amazement, my bed drifted farther and farther out into the sea that once was my bedroom floor. My bedroom walls became nothing more than mountains in the distance. As terrified as I was, the scene was nothing less than majestic. My bed drifted for what felt like days until the sea eventually narrowed down into a river with colossal cliffs on both sides. I travelled along the river, the cliffs were moving inwards, and eventually I would be crushed if I did not find a way to make it past them in time. The sky turned many shades of red and blue, voices cried out in the air, I lay in my bed, terrified. A loud thundering noise approached, I looked up to see that the river was coming to an end, only to be replaced by a waterfall. The rivers current became faster, I held onto the sides of my bed in utter terror, awaiting my fate. I caught a glimpse of what lay beyond the edge and it was a seemingly infinite drop into the black abyss. I immediately plummeted downwards, spiraling out of control. My vision became distorted, I tasted colors and could see sounds. The abyss consumed me.
As I regained consciousness I realized time had frozen. I was still in mid air, but I was not falling. I was paralyzed within my own body. I stared downwards and tried as hard as I could to move. My attempts were futile. Suddenly a blindingly bright light grew from the abyss below. I tried to look away but I had become too entranced by it. My skin began to singe. I cried out in pain and tried to shut my eyes, but the brighter it became and the more it grew, the more entranced I had become. The pain only became unbearable when I tried to fight it. I gave in and let myself be devoured by it.
I awoke on a grassy field with only fragments of memories to what I had just experienced. I looked around at my surroundings. The grass was a deep shade of blue and the sky was a bright pink. I was on a hilltop surrounding a meadow, I sat up and laid up against a tree to take in my surroundings. The grass and its deep shade of blue very much intrigued me. I grabbed hold of a blade and picked it, I placed it in my pocket. Suddenly, the earth let out an ear shattering shriek, the grass turned from blue to a malevolent red. The blades of grass grew and tied around my legs and arms preventing me from escaping. I felt myself sinking into the ground and panic ensued. I tried to fight it but it was too strong. The grass grew over me until everything was covered in darkness. I closed my eyes and tried to sleep. I awoke in my bed. My bedroom was in order and everything seemed normal again. Maybe it was all just a dream? I got up and walked downstairs, trying to recount the crazy events of my dream. I felt something in my pocket. I took out what appeared to be a blade of grass, it was blue.
 
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