What do you think about this poem?

[Faceless]

I'm starting to write again,
and just wanted to get some feedback before entering it into my book.

Deep breaths, one in, then out,
Eye to eye, drop of sweat.
Lips moist and apart,
Slippery skin.
Closeness for a minute,
Second round.
Breath in, hit, miss.
You win.
Silence.

Honest opinion please, tell me what you think I'm talking about, and just general analyzation if you can. Thank you~
It's two people having sex, but it's kinda like a boxing match. The end.. well, I'm a girl, and I wrote that, so the guy wins.. get it? And the silence... the two didn't have feelings for each other, or anything in common. Hence the silence..
I kinda wanted two meanings here, so yeah.. I'm glad i'm getting some good feedback..
Thank you guys

 

[Professor Swag]

Good poem. You must be talking about boxing or some other kind of martial art. Am i right? Like when your at your corner you are taking deep breaths and still sweating. The sweat is most likley on your lips and your breathing through your mouth making your lips apart. Slippery and sweaty skin. Second round is beginning. You breath in then jab but you miss. He hits you and your knocked out with and hear silence. The other person wins.

 

[i.banana]

i dont really understand, the meaning is kinda blur.
nice one, anyway

 

[Max]

its fine
but i dont get at the end

 

[Mishima]

Seems like a fight of some sort. The ending had a tint of ambiguity and i think the narrator person won. Not so sure though.

 

[Jake]

my first opinon was that u were fing someone intimently

 

[MarathonManMoreover]

you shouldn't put your own poems out onto the internet. no one will respect them and the ones that might, well they just might steal them.