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psychosmurf16
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I had to write this for a school project on Anorexia. I was supposed to think about how I would feel as an anorexic person. Yes, I am aware that all the lines rhyme. I'm not writing a completely rhyming poem because I'm not creative enough to do otherwise, I just wanted something simple and to the point. What do you think? Constructive criticism please, are there any lines I should rewrite? Thank you! =~]
Anorexia
I can't sleep at night.
Eating is a hopeless plight
My clothes feel too tight
I know something just isn't right.
My body wants food, but I still fight
What I want isn't in sight
I'm looking for an inner light
But all I see is white.
In my mirror I have no delight
I'm still not happy, not quite.
So I wish I may, I wish I might
I wish that I could be alright.
Anorexia
I can't sleep at night.
Eating is a hopeless plight
My clothes feel too tight
I know something just isn't right.
My body wants food, but I still fight
What I want isn't in sight
I'm looking for an inner light
But all I see is white.
In my mirror I have no delight
I'm still not happy, not quite.
So I wish I may, I wish I might
I wish that I could be alright.