What do you think about my poem?

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Jacoby

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I'm letting the ever intensifying thoughts of pure emotion,
bleed from the pen without a single thought
of repercussion or meaning,
life is swell as i have been told to tell myself.
Life is Swell
Lingering in your answer, you disguise the truth,
with a dimly lit agreement into an envious stare.
This is no contest, just you and i,
collapse to silence i hold my breath.
Knowing the capabilities of fuel upon your fire,
I bring myself out of my shell and to my own disbelief,
I utter the five hardest words,
Are you in or out?
 
Yea, we are all gifted at trying to disguise the truth, thats why we have avatars here, but truth has a way of jumping out of us anyway. I wonder what it would feel like to be so brave,to always speak truth. I wonder how long you would last before someone stabbed you through the heart for it, I love that you are willing to come out of your protective shell and expose yourself. That is the bravest thing you could have done. The last line is the perfect kicker for the turtle shell...you have to stick your neck out to move ahead.
 
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