what do u think of this poem?

[imported_shy_girl]

i wrote it about my ex.

we were in love,
but it ended out of no where,
you've stopped loving me,
but you're still in my small heart,
every night i cry myself to sleep,
wishing you would take me back,
i've made a mistake,
he was my life, my first love, my first kiss,
and every thing wrecked,
you'll always be in my heart, on my mind,
i'll never forget you.


tell me what ya think pretty please

 

[A V]

That is a really insightful poem. Being a poem writer myself, I think you have expressed the memories and feelings of the relationship very well. It makes me feel all your pain and regret and there are few poems who succeed in conveying the feelings of the author. Very nice job! You should publish a book or something---keep it up.

 

[Ciaran]

This poem is very bland and does not really highlight your own experience. It sums up the general experience of such happenings.

Read some TS Eliot, proper poetry.