what do u think of this poem?

[zana l]

so many thoughts going through my mind, but how to put them in words? family. money. school. music. a secret crush that almost everyone knows about already. the death of a close family member.
so many emotions, but how to deal with them? stress. anger. love. hate. depression. guilt.
so many problems, but where are the solutions? so many questions but i get no answer. so many solutions but how do i solve a problem that has no answer??

 

[~You Know I Know You ~]

its okay work on it a bit and put it into stanzas

 

[Cry]

Ok well, i think that you've portrayed the despairing situation that your persona is entrapped in well, with the repitition of many frustrating matters. When i read it i felt a certain discomfort, like as though these issues are literally "bugging" me, causing me to feel gidy- which i think that this was what you've wanted to bring out right?

Your poem presents a paradox of having "so many solutions" but not being able to solve all the questions.

 

[Joanne935]

it's nice.'.'.'.'

 

[work in progress]

It could use some help with the stanzas. The enter key doesn't bite ;] But other than that, I think you did a pretty good job.

 

[sportschik1103]

that is really good i think it really speaks out about the situation, i dont what you were thinking of when you wrote it but it is really good