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Part one
“Excalibur”
He ran faster. And faster. But no matter how hard he tried to make his legs speed up, the something or someone was still close behind. And it was gaining up.
“You can run, Kenji, but you can’t hide!” It bellowed terrifyingly, its deep voice echoing across the forest.
It was dark around him. He could feel it closing in on him, its invisible walls squeezing the air out of him, making him run even faster. He could feel his heart thumping widely inside his chest. It felt as if it was about to explode. Suddenly, he skidded to a stop in front of a dark pond. Gasping ravenously for breath, he shifted his cerulean blue eyes around the odd pond. Whatever or whoever was following him had vanished along so with it’s horrible voice, as if sucked in by the tall trees.
Cautiously, he bent down and ran his hand through the pond, then recoiled, gasping in horror. It was blood!
“What the…” he shrieked, staring wide-eyed at the dark red blood trickling down his arm. Then he saw them. Two heavenly, but lifeless, bodies were floating close by. Who were they?
Suddenly, Kenji heard a low musical voice immediately realizing who had called out his name.
Kenji felt tears sting his eyes as his body felt numb, his pulse throbbing. “M…mother?” he stammered, calling weakly. “Mizuki Sama?!”
He felt like the little boy he was eight years ago, the time his mother and sister were killed by his cruel father. Finally, the two spirits confronted him. His mother looked down at him, more exotic than ever. They were so beautiful; each had long, lustrous black hair that curled down their spine, and clear, azure eyes.
“Kenji, child, you must bring peace and tranquility to Japan! Your disgraceful father will soon set conquest on the nation and destroy Japan along with you!” His mother said in a melancholic voice. Kenji hesitated as visions of his father on that day came up. His father had killed his mother and sister then turned to him and asked if he wanted to live or die. Of course he wanted to live, but Kenji silently vowed to destroy the Chinese Empire someday along with his wicked father. And that someday was soon. He could feel it.
“Mother, Mizuki Sama, I vowed to destroy China along with my father, and I’ll keep my promise! I won’t let you down!” he called in a strong voice.
Mizuki tenderly smiled and reached out her ghostly hand. “Excalibur” she said then they both vanished. Kenji stood there dumbfounded.
“Excalibur? Isn’t that the sword of…King Arthur?” he thought out loud, not noticing the large shadow that draped over his body.
“Kenji!” The haunting voice came again. He spun around only to be face by glowing red eyes.
 
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