what do u think about this poem i wrote for this Girl ?

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Cubby

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her name i Rose she's a good friends but i have fallen for her and i'm sure of that . well anyways what do u think



"My Rose"

I've never met a person that could light up a room ..
almost like if out of nowhere like a flower came out and bloom ..
now to be honest, i never knew what love was ..
but it sure feel like this ..
I'm in love , I'm insecure ..
I'm not sure of what i do ..
see you got me all confused ..
you , i have fallen for you ..
you, with the eyes bright as the stars ..
you ,who could break any barriers any bars..
you ,who makes ME smile every day ..
you ,are the one that takes my breath away ..
i felt for someone before ..
but, you're the one who my heart is for ..
you are my forever rose ..
 
OMG! I love it she will too good for you my fave is the forever rose part good luck telling her i know she like you too :)
 
uh no, that was gay. do not use her name in the poem, she will hate that. its dumb. it needs to be way more poetic. use big words. and dont say that you are insecure cause every girl likes a confident guy. and that flowering blooming part, that was mega gay. thats a no no.
 
Uhh... not burst your bubble, but I think that sounds kind of stalkerish. It would creep me out if you gave that to me...
 
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