Thoughts on this poem?

[Mandy <3 [rip MSK]]

This is unfinished but this is what i have so far.

Breathe with my heart
listen with my soul
wishing, hoping, praying
To never let you go.

Every time we met
you start to blush
our eyes connect
and the blood starts to rush
I begin to smile
this attraction's too much
the repealing force weakening
and now I feel your touch.

(please ignore bad grammer )
& be honest.=)
I need constructive critiszm. I wrote this myself and i want to make it as good as i can.
Thx so far, but it is not close to done, i just wanted to see what people thought of it so far.

 

[cantthinkofany]

1st stanza has 4 lines
the 2nd has 8
why???

 

[Kat]

You remind me of my first love. That really hit my heart. But I feel kind of empty towards the end. It needs an end.

 

[melikap1]

I really like it, but I feel that the ending wasn't closing enough, like it was really a "ending." I just felt that it kinda stopped.

Hope that helped!

 

[musicme8]

omg i love it good work